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Love typing fanfics. And want to one day be a great fanfic writer, but to become one of the masters, I must practice and train. And never give up!

I have done fanfics and plan to do fanfics in the following fandoms-

Naruto

Halo

Star Wars

Half-Life 2 and its episodes

Portal

(more to be announced...)
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Hope everyone had a great Christmas and Happy New Year's!

A new year, and new possibilities...

I have been through many hardships myself, but like Naruto Uzumaki, I'll never ever give up.

And I have many new fanfic ideas, want to make more fanfics this year than the last. After all, practice makes one better!

I have also gotten into new fandoms such as Overwatch. Such a very interesting game with a story with so many possibilities. Really like the female characters, imagine all of them on the same team...any bad guy is really going to have a horrible day between getting hacked by Sombra, Tracer zipping around, Pharah raining justice from above, Mei putting the enemy on ice, Widowmaker sniping, D. Va's mech ripping through enemy ranks, Zarya just plain thrashing them with that beam of her's that gets stronger the more damage her and her teammate's barriers absorb, Ana sniping and also healing teammates and using a sleep dart to put foes to sleep for a time, Mercy's healing, and Symmetra's turrets...

Also I have I have really gotten into doing Neji fanfics. I was afraid of doing characters out of character by accident but I realized that I likely wouldn't get any jerks commenting as long as I try and ask for constructive criticism. Because the last time something bad happened as a result was years ago, and I was a rookie and did the characterizations of characters very badly. And it was an entirely different fandom (Mass Effect, for those curious).

I have been writing fanfics in other fandoms as well such as Halo (many are set in the Forerunner era) and Overwatch amongst others.

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This was only brought to my attention, bizarrely, after six years of fanfic writing in Fanfiction.net. And after I had fanfics that fell into the issue addressed by a Fanfiction.net user by the name of Yemi Hikari who said this-

“There wasn't enough introspective. Most of the story just repeated canon events that we already know, and the only original part is the bar scene. The piece needs major editing, as just repeating canon events and not adding anything to it's a big "don't-do", as that means the majority of the work is the original creators, and not your own, and thus plagiarism. And no, typing up existing scenes, that doesn't count as work. However, cutting down the paraphrasing, and adding introspective will fix this problem.”

The bizarre thing I am talking about is if it is a big writer “don't do” then why didn't anyone tell me until this point? Why did those stories that the problem applied to remain for years without someone telling me?

The reason for the paraphrasing was, a few years ago, I was doing Naruto fanfics. And I feel I can describe my “fear of doing characters out of character by accident and getting hateful comments” as a borderline phobia. Since I had gotten so much hate and vitriol from 2010-2012 when I tried to do crossovers involving Mass Effect. It wasn't so bad with my Naruto fanfics at the time. Since I had done fanfics back then that were like that for a few of them, and some having minor characters that I wasn't so worried about since they had little personality and character to start with. Some examples-

Fanfics using minor characters or OC characters:

Cold Ice: this was a Naruto fanfic with Urakaku, a Samurai character who had a lot of personality room to fill in.

Headband: another Naruto fanfic. It was a story that had an OC with no canon characters. This was based on a scene from the Naruto anime that showed a headband on the ground with a blood streak under it.

Invasion of Hidden Leaf: this Naruto fanfic used Iwashi Tatami, who like Urakaku had room for development. And thus I wasn't so scared of doing him wrong by accident. It had a few canon characters but they only showed up very briefly and thus I felt I could do them right.

Kage Duel: this Naruto fanfic didn't stay on Fanfiction.net long, since while the Kages used were more minor and not as much developed in personality, I felt I didn't do them justice so I took it down.

Ninja Escape: a crossover containing a Naruto character. Yes, my fear even extended to crossovers. I used a minor character named Reki as the main character.

Sealed Clan: a Naruto story using Kurotsuchi. I wanted to do a female Naruto character, and used her since she didn't have so much personality and thus one would have to really try to screw up.

Fanfics where the paraphrasing problem applied to:

Death of a Hero: The paraphrasing problem applies to this Naruto fanfic, as it was about the death of Kaiza who tried to stop Gatō in the Land of Waves. And time skips to a scene with Sakura. I did add some original content but not enough. The main original content parts, which are not that large, are the beginning when Kaiza went off to face Gatō, some tiny single sentence original additions here and there, and an add on where Sakura saves the kid who stole some food to feed his starving family from a group of men about to beat him. I wanted to have a strong Sakura. I could very well re-write the fanfic, to include the “strong Sakura” parts, and include at the start of Kakashi teaching Sakura the “Flying Mist Nail Technique”.

Poison: another Naruto story with paraphrased content using a filler character named Tatewaki, a Samurai. There was a few original spots here and there but much of it was paraphrased content. And I added an extra scene at the end where Tatewaki dies.

Deidara Kills Sasuke: a Naruto fanfic, now named Out with a Bang, that before it was beta'd by :iconuberchimerism: had a lot of paraphrased content. As it was basically the scene of when Deidara exploded with Sasuke dying instead of summoning Manda. Though the dialouge has been changed so its no longer paraphrased content.

Swordsmen: this is a story using a minor character presumably killed by Suigetsu named Funari. I gave him a bit of a back story but I used paraphrased lines. The original parts were the back story and some added stuff such as showing Funari's death.

Tyrant: another Naruto story that has paraphrased content. I did add some original content but not enough. I had an original scene at the start.

The Pain of a Jinchūriki: this is another Naruto fanfic with paraphrased content. And as Yemi Hikari said, the only original scene was the bar scene. There was some other spots but only sentences added and stuff.

Unstoppable Ninja: yet another Naruto fanfic with paraphrased content. There was some original scenes but not enough.

I have one fanfic where I used my favorite character Neji Hyūga and also Rock Lee. It is called “To Protect One's Best Friend”. I did so to try to overcome my phobia and it actually helped. It is a few years old now, was posted in 2013. It seems I did the two very well since I didn't get the hateful comments I was so fearful of.

Not onto another thing I want to discuss and know some answers to-

Is it a bad thing to use lines from something in a game, TV show, movie, cartoon, or anime, or manga in the story word for word and add introspection, emotions, and content that I created myself?

To help clarify what I mean, my story is about the characters first mentioned in the Halo 3 Terminals- The Didact and The Librarian. Their real names were eventually reveled in later media. Here's a sample of one of their conversations in the Halo 3 Terminals copied and pasted from the Halo wiki (The Halo 3 Terminals are like logs the character can access if they can find the logs in the level, they're kind of hidden in most cases so one has to look while others are more hidden in plain sight)-


L: Categorization has sped since the
improvements were announced, but
there are many hurdles. The indexing
of sentient species may have
irreversible effects on the
surviving insentient species.
We will have extinction events and
irreparable environmental harm on at
least 18 worlds. Current projections
estimate post-archival cataclysm on
as many as 31 worlds. The paucity of
sentience has been a blessing in
this regard.

D: How formal you are, Librarian.
We're receiving shipments of indexed
beings more frequently than
communications. Don't compound
scarcity with brevity. I know things beyond the [Maginot]
line are harried. But I worry about
you. I've asked you time and time
again. Abandon your cataloging.
Come back inside, where my fleets
can keep you e home.

L: Would that it were my choice.
I have committed to this course
because it's the right thing to do.
We no longer have the manpower or
materiel to excise remedial measures
at a planetary level. I certainly
can't justify using the [transit
measure] to save my own skin when
there are still so many innocents to
protect and index.

D: You know I oppose your mission,
but you're exceeding its parameters
anyway. You've put yourself in
jeopardy. You've done enough. If you will not come to me, I will
find my way to you.

L: We have no time to spare, Didact.
Every vessel we can fill, we send to
the Ark. I dare not cease the
mission. Not now, not until I've
done all I can. Each one of these
souls is finite and precious. And I'm close. Close to saving them all.

As one can see, it is only words without much emotion really. And I become very interested in giving those words emotion, scenes, etc. Expanding upon and giving a story.

In the story itself, I have added more stuff beyond just the conversations. And in cases added an ending to each of those conversations since it is likely they are just fragments in the Terminals. Also I've added more scenes and beefed things up.

Here is what Yemi Hikari said, each block of quotation marks means another message-

“Yeah. That helps jog my memory. It actually wasn't that long ago I left the review. Thanks for taking care of that, as it could have gotten you into serious trouble with the admins. :)

“I actually know the fandom, but you're right in saying that the question doesn't require me knowing said fandom. Yes, it's a bad thing to use lines from the game word for word, but it is also bad to also paraphrase the lines. There are a few exceptions to the rules. For example, catch phrases get a pass as do the names of attacks. The other exception is when you've got a line which would be considered inspirational, and something another character would remember later on as advice, or something they remember in a negative way.

In regards to paraphrasing, some paraphrasing is allowed. There is a major difference between, however, paraphrasing the entire part point for point, and paraphrasing to get the main points across. Something to keep in mind is the fans will have read the piece, or in this case watched the cut scene. They know what happened, so they only need a brief rehash of the canon material, a brief summary rather than a summarization of every single detail. Focus should be placed on your work, and not the work of another person.

Hope this helps.”

“Yeah. Not only does quoting the lines not fall under fair use, there's a rule regarding copying from works still under copyright. That said, the problem can be easily fixed. For example, if the scene you're working with were say the scene where Naruto's put into his group, instead of quoting the lines which occur, and going into detail, all you need is one or two lines saying what happened.

I can't speak for Herr Wozzeck, since I'm not familiar with either one of those works. If they're just borrowing the races and settings from another fanfic, or even characters, that's not a problem. As fanfic writers, we're already doing that with the fandoms we write for.

I actually wrote a few essays on the topic which I posted to my wattpad account.

wattpad dot com/100902995-how-to-write-a-good-fanfic-2-plagiarism-vs
wattpad dot com/157243728-how-to-write-a-good-fanfic-2-2-copyright-vs
wattpad dot com/319484463-how-to-write-a-good-fanfic-2-3-how-to-properly “

(For those wanting to check, I think one needs an account since when I checked one of the links it said I had to log in to read the rest of it...)

“As for MSTs.

First, MST is actually against site rules, but whether a MST falls under fair use or constitutes plagiarism depends. AN MST is a manner in which to offer critical commentary on a poorly written fanfic, so when used for said purpose the work falls under fair use due to purpose. However, stories which simply have the characters making random comments which offer no critical insight to the work do not fall under fair use, so doing an MST for a well written fic is out of the question, due to the fact the MST does not add any critical insight.

However, there's never been a real consensuses on how much of the original fic one may use within an MST. I suggest checking out das-sporking dot livejournal dot com/247319 dot html if you really want more information. For me, the rule of thumb is to limit the amount of quoting one does within the MST or spork, and only quote if it actually adds something. Most of the work should still be your commentary. It is as Das_Mervin says, "a review. It's constructive criticism..." Add to this, fanfiction falls into a weird place in regards to copyright, so while one's protected from having ones fic plagiarized, not so much in regards to MST and spork.

It takes a lot of work to MST or spork something though, and do it well.”

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The reason for all of this here is because, to be truly honest, I am so confused and feels like there's...contradictions. No fault on Yemi Hikari's part though, he/she did nothing wrong, was just trying to help. And I appreciate it. Will list questions at the end.

Also, in the Fanfiction.net guidelines, does it clearly say anything about paraphrased content? Copied and Pasted the guidelines-

Here is a list of conducts that should always be observed:
1. Spell check all story and poetry. There is no excuse for not performing this duty. If you do not have a word processor that has the spell checking feature, use a search engine such as Google.com to find one.

2. Proofread all entries for grammar and other aspects of writing before submission. 'Hot off the press' content is often riddled with errors. No one is perfect but it is the duty of the writer to perform to the best of his/her ability.

3. Respect the reviewers. Not all reviews will strictly praise the work. If someone rightfully criticizes a portion of the writing, take it as a compliment that the reviewer has opted to spend his/her valuable time to help improve your writing.

4. Everyone here is an aspiring writer. Respect your fellow members and lend a helping a hand when they need it. Like many things, the path to becoming a better writer is often a two way street.

5. Use proper textual formatting. For example: using only capital letters in the story title, summary, or content is not only incorrect but also a disregard for the language itself.
The chapter system is not to be used as placeholder for non-story content such as author notes. You can add short author notes to the beginning or at the end of stories but never as individual chapters.

FanFiction is not an archive for non-fanfiction literary works. Please visit FictionPress to publish your non-fanfiction literary works.

Do not upload chapters, series, or segments of a story as separate entries. In order to submit a 5 chapter story, for example, use the 'Create Story' page to submit chapter 1, and then use the 'Edit/Upload chapter' feature in the left menu, after login, to submit chapters 2 through 5.

Entries not allowed:
1. Non-stories: lists, bloopers, polls, previews, challenges, author notes, and etc.

2. One or two liners.

3. MST: comments inserted in between the flow of a copied story.

4. Stories with non-historical and non-fictional characters: actors, musicians, and etc.

5. Any form of interactive entry: choose your adventure, second person/you based, Q&As, and etc.

6. Chat/script format and keyboard dialogue based entries.

Actions not allowed:
1. Multiple entries of the same material. There can only be one copy of any unique story on the entire site. No exceptions.

2. Rewriting names of characters/locations of one story in order to upload to multiple categories.

3. Copying from a previously published work (including musical lyrics) not in the public domain.
General rules:
1. Entry title and summary must be rated K for all audience. No exceptions.

2. Entry must be given the proper rating. No exceptions.

3. Entry must be placed in proper category. No exceptions.

4. Chapters of the same story are not allowed to be submitted as separate entries. All chapters/segments must be grouped together using the 'edit/upload chapter' feature in the left menu.
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I can't seem to point my finger at it but will list the things I find off-

if paraphrasing is so bad, why isn't it on the Fanfiction.net list of rules clearly defined?

If paraphrasing is so bad, would that make MSTs bad too since they use paraphrased content from fanfics?

One thing that bothers me is- when someone steals fanart, takes it and posts it without another's permission, people flip and send comments telling the person to take the stolen artwork down. Yet, when someone takes and posts someone else's fanfic and MSTs it, sometimes gravely insulting the writer (happened to me and my wrath would make Naruto's Six Tails rampage look like a minor tantrum) it is allowed and when one tries to fight back, they get called dumb, hostile, and other mean things. And people don't get up in arms against MSTs even though it basically is like stealing artwork if you don't ask for permission first. And when they ripped apart my stories, they never asked for permission, and the person who did it and commenter who commented on it said some deeply insulting and upsetting things about me.

And my second biggest question- if paraphrasing is so bad, why did no one else tell me until Yemi did, four years after I started doing those stories with the paraphrased content?  

And my biggest question and source of hesitation in trying to restart a crossover I put on hiatus- how is one supposed to keep a character in character when one covers scenes from a video game? Wouldn't changing the lines throw the character out of character?
Deafness

The inability to hear. People can be born deaf. Or can damage or lose their hearing in later life.

Deaf Culture exists. People who embrace their deafness and use ASL, American Sign Language. A unique language that needs to be recognized, not put down by others.

In some ways a blessing.

Deafness means not hearing the annoying barking dog next door.

Deafness means not hearing loud irritating music from your neighbors.

Deafness means not hearing annoying noises in general.

Deafness means understanding the pain of others with disabilities more easily.

Deafness means viewing captions and subtitles as helpful instead of annoying and being in the way.

Deafness means having access to a thriving rich international community, deaf culture. And having access to American Sign Language and other forms of sign language.

Though it can be considered not a blessing for many reasons.

Deaf people suffer from discrimination. Audism. The notion one is superior based on one's ability to hear, or to behave in the manner of one who hears, or that life without hearing is futile or miserable, or an attitude based on pathological thinking which results in a negative stigma towards anyone who does not hear.

Another is Hearing Privilege. Meaning societal privileges that benefit people who can hear, and those privileges are beyond reach for those who are deaf and hard of hearing people in the same social, political, and economic circumstances. Which many hearing people take for granted.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear fully naturally and clearly without the need of a cochlear implant or hearing aids.

Hearing Privilege is assuming hearing aids or cochlear implants provide the same access as “typical” hearing does.

Hearing Privilege is assuming that turning up the cochlear implant or hearing aids allow for better hearing. When actually it increases background noises as well.

Hearing Privilege is being able to communicate with friends freely over a Xbox headset, without the need for a social media site for communication with the one who is deaf. And therefore quicker reaction times.

Hearing Privilege is not wondering if the person heard or understood you over the Xbox headset while playing on the Xbox.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear announcements being made, such as on a plane or in a building.

Hearing Privilege is getting to decide whether providing accessibility options such as captioning, interpreters, etc, is “in the budget” or not.

Hearing Privilege is being able to use the drive thru with ease.

Hearing Privilege is being able to see your doctor when you need it most, not when an interpreter is available.

Hearing Privilege is having access to other people's conversations when you pass them on the street. And the possibility of making new friends.

Hearing Privilege is being ale to know today's specials at a restaurant when the server shares them at your table.

Hearing Privilege is the ability to respond to a customer's request to move your cart instead of crashing theirs into yours for not responding.

Hearing Privilege is being able to have a conversation with your family.

Hearing Privilege is not when your Uber ride cancels out on your because the driver keeps calling you, not answering your texts.

Hearing Privilege is being able to buy a mobile phone contract and use the inclusive call minutes and listen to voicemail too.

Hearing Privilege is not worrying about group calls or dim lighting when talking with someone.

Hearing Privilege is being able to call 911 in an emergency.

Hearing Privilege is not being in additional danger when swimming because you have to remove your hearing aids or cochlear and thus miss any shouted warnings.

Hearing Privilege is being able to go see the latest movie without worrying about if the movie theater will make it accessible with subtitles or closed captions.

Hearing Privilege is being able to enjoy any translated media such as Naruto DVDs, Ninja Scroll, and more without needing captions. And not being upset by the fact there's English subtitles for Japanese audio, yet no English subtitles for English audio.

Hearing Privilege is being able to access older media which may lack captions completely.

Hearing Privilege is signing up to join the US Army, Navy, or Marines.

Hearing Privilege is not being questioned on your ability to care for and raise a child.

Hearing Privilege is when you aren't accused of child abuse for having your deaf child learn American Sign Language instead of getting a cochlear implant.  

Hearing Privilege is not missing out on language development and ending up behind your peers on language.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear the words of your parents, brothers, sisters, and family members as an infant and keep up with your peers in developing language.

Hearing Privilege is doing a presentation and worrying about looking stupid because you weren't prepared, not because of a bad interpreter.

Hearing Privilege is hearing your child's first words, and hearing your mother's final words.

Hearing Privilege means being trusted to sit at the exit row on a plane. You are automatically considered capable of being heroic.

Hearing Privilege is being able to watch almost any video on the internet, captioned or not.

Hearing Privilege is being able to understand what is being said on a video, TV, or video game without the need for captions.

Hearing Privilege is being able to listen on the radio clearly.

Hearing Privilege is not needing a stranger as an interpreter present while giving birth to your child so you can understand the doctor and nurses.

Hearing Privilege is having the choice not to listen.

Hearing Privilege is not having one's intelligence or work ability questioned based on language modality.

Hearing Privilege is being able to choose your friends more freely, and can make friends with other hearing people, instead of only the ones willing to communicate with you.

Hearing Privilege is being educated in your own language alongside people you can actually understand.

Hearing Privilege is faith accessibility. To be able to walk in and fully participate and fully understand everything.

Hearing Privilege is being able to find and meet with mental health professionals who speak your language.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear the 'loud and verbal commands' given by cops before they shoot.

Hearing Privilege is not having to deal with the various forms of Audism many deaf people have to put up with. One form is not assisting communication,

Hearing Privilege is not having peers or family members saying things such as 'never mind” or “its not important” or something like that if one misses a conversation. Or assuming deaf or hard of hearing people can't do things that they could do. And more.

Hearing Privilege is not worrying about something being inaccessible due to being voice software and lacking captions.

Hearing Privilege is not being told to stop using sign language because someone said it was distracting.

Hearing Privilege is not having to work much harder to achieve the same outcome, deaf people have to often work much harder to achieve the same outcome as hearing people.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear your name called for your food at a restaurant.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear your name or your child's name at a doctor's office.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear your number to pick up your item you paid for.

Hearing Privilege is being able to comply if you're injured or pronounce your name as it sounds like so you can have someone find you.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear the fire alarm or smoke detector.

Hearing Privilege is not worrying about having qualified interpreters in the right classrooms in school.

Hearing Privilege is not missing bits and pieces of conversation and not wanting to intrude because there will be a simple 'never mind'.

Hearing Privilege is being at ease at airports as they know should anything change they'll hear an announcement.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear a lecture, consult a lawyer, or go to the doctor's office and knowing the words are accessible if they speak the same language. And not having to worry about the hassle of getting an interpreter and about who will pay for the interpreter.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear someone knocking on the door when they don't use the doorbell.

Hearing Privilege is not struggling so much with dialogue in writing due to easily being able to tell good dialogue from bad dialogue via audio means.

Hearing Privilege means going to any movie theater, even the ones that don't have captions on their movies.

Hearing Privilege means not being considered “less than” due to their audiological status.

Hearing Privilege means being able to apply to any university they choose without discrimination and not having to worry about whether an interpreter will be available when they attend.

Hearing Privilege means not having to worry about funding for interpreters.

Hearing Privilege means having direct communication with peers and teachers in a classroom without the use of an interpreter.

Hearing Privilege means getting to have full communication with parents and family in their first language.

Hearing Privilege means getting to share the same cultural values as their family.

Hearing Privilege means not having to defend and fight to have their language recognized and respected.

Hearing Privilege means being able to apply at any job they choose without fear of discrimination.

Hearing Privilege means being able to watch almost anything on TV, movie theaters, internet, video games, etc without needing captioning, even if the material doesn't have them in the first place.

Hearing Privilege means being considered a part of “normal” society.

Hearing Privilege means being able to expect fair customer service at stores and restaurants.

Hearing Privilege means being able to easily communicate on the telephone and not be hung up on because the person on the other side of the line doesn't want to deal with them.

Hearing Privilege means being at ease at restaurants, on buses, ferries, trains, and airplanes because if anything goes wrong, they'll hear a warning being announced.

Hearing Privilege means having auditory devices easily accommodated to them such as doorbells and alarms.

Hearing Privilege means being able to easily and freely engage in conversation with family, friends, coworkers, neighbors, and strangers.

Hearing Privilege means being able to go to a museum or special events without needing an interpreter.

Hearing Privilege means not having their intelligence automatically questioned as soon as someone meets them.

Hearing Privilege means not having people come up to them and try and be funny by mimicking their language.  

Hearing Privilege means being able to go out without making sure they have paper and pen on them at all times in case they need to communicate.

Hearing Privilege means not having to worry about whether they are lip-reading someone properly.

Hearing Privilege means not having to worry about showing up and being singled out as “the only person like that” at an event.

Hearing Privilege means being happy with the way they are and not having to defend their reasoning for not wanting to change anything about themselves.

Hearing Privilege means being able to go any social event without feeling left out because the majority is communicating in a different language on a regular basis.

Hearing Privilege means being able to understand conversations at social events without worrying about missing stuff, asking what was said, and being told “never mind” or suchlike.

Hearing Privilege means being able to feel sure that any social event they choose to attend will be easily accessible to them, and do not feel the need to get in touch in advance to ensure that it is accessible.

Hearing Privilege means not constantly having to explain and defend their very existence.

Hearing Privilege means not constantly having to explain and defend the fact the language they use is in fact a real language.

Hearing Privilege means your parents will share the same culture and language as them.

Hearing Privilege means being able to participate in family conversations without having to struggle to understand the content of these conversations.

Hearing Privilege means not worrying about their parents going to extreme measures such as surgeries and therapies to change who they fundamentally are and how they communicate.

Hearing Privilege means knowing their parents will love and accept them for who they basically are.

Hearing Privilege means they can typically expect to have a loving, supportive relationship with their families.

Hearing Privilege means being able to often look forward to visiting and being with family, and go to big family events and know they are accessible.

Hearing Privilege means being able to turn on the TV and expect to find programming in their language and see themselves represented, and often fairly accurately, on screen.

Hearing Privilege means being able to watch a nationally televised sporting event or suchlike and hear the National Anthem performed in its entirety. When a deaf ASL performer is doing so alongside the hearing performer, we will all too often see only a few token seconds of the singed performance; almost never the enure performance. This happened again during this year's Superbowl.

Hearing Privilege means when something goes wrong with the audio portion of a television show, they can expect it will be fixed immediately. Problems with closed captions often will persist throughout the duration of most, if not the entire, show.

Hearing Privilege means not having to think about whether a show they want to watch will be accessible to them or not.

Hearing Privilege means being able to go to a movie and expect not to stick out like a sore thumb by having weird-looking devices that give captions. They also do not have to waste time getting and returning said devices. And they don't have to worry about them messing up and missing information in the movie. And also can have full access to the soundtrack without having to rely on unsatisfactory halfway measures such as the “Captiview” and “caption glasses”.

Hearing Privilege is getting their instruction directly from teachers and not through a third party such as interpreters.

Hearing Privilege means they can expect their teachers and other educational personnel to be fluent in the same language as theirs.

Hearing Privilege means being able to expect to attend school in the same neighborhood as they live in, and with peers who are like themselves.

Hearing Privilege means expecting their educational, and just about any other, environment to be set up for their learning and social needs.

Hearing Privilege means expecting their language to be valued and supported, and without pressure to be changed by forces outside of their linguistic community.

Hearing Privilege means being able to communicate directly with their doctors and other medical personnel without a third party in the room or needing to resort to writing.

Hearing Privilege means if being treated for a condition, they won't be asked by the EMTs why they have not undergone totally unrelated medical procedures, such as getting a cochlear implant.

Hearing Privilege means being able to expect to see politicians and candidates for office who look and speak like them.

Hearing Privilege means expecting to see politicians and candidates for office who will discuss issues that are directly important to them.

Hearing Privilege means being able to expect to express issues that are important to themselves to politicians without needing to explain why these are important or what the issue is about.

Hearing Privilege means being able to expect to run for office themselves without people doubting their capabilities due to lack of hearing and also be seriously considered.

Hearing Privilege means being able to communicate with store personnel directly and without any difficulties in communication.

Hearing Privilege means being able to strike up a conversation with a random stranger in line and expect that person to respond in a similar manner.

Hearing Privilege means being able to have their job application considered without being immediately eliminated for the position solely because they communicate differently.

Hearing Privilege means not having to disclose whether they are hearing or deaf to potential employers out of fear of discrimination.

Hearing Privilege means not having to make decisions on whether to ask for an interpreter at a job interview or risk misunderstandings if they tough it out by lipreading and speak for themselves.

Hearing Privilege means not having to defend their capability for a job by having to explain how they can perform job functions differently.

Hearing Privilege means being able to call and attend meetings at the last minute without worrying if an interpreter will be present.

Hearing Privilege means being able to expect law personnel to communicate with them directly and in their own language.

Hearing Privilege means being able to communicate after being arrested and placed in handcuffs. One can't sign with hands with their hands behind their back.

Hearing Privilege means being able to expect the legal system to work for them, since the system is based on the social norms that are shared by hearing people.

Hearing Privilege means expecting to be tried by a jury of their peers, of whom at least a significant percentage share their identity and life experiences.

Hearing Privilege means generally expecting to be treated more fairly in the justice and law system.

Hearing Privilege is not worrying about burdening your class with interpreter requests for meetings/events. No last minute group meetings.

Hearing Privilege is when you can take notes and listen to the teacher at the same time. You can take advantage of incidental learning.

Hearing Privilege is being able to continue to higher levels of education without worrying about interpreters' level of expertise in your field.

Hearing Privilege is being able to choose your class options based on interest, not interpreter availability.

Hearing Privilege is knowing that the language you use is valid, in some school districts American Sign Language isn't considered a language.

Hearing Privilege is having full access to educational and professional resources to advance your career, without fighting for accessibility.

Hearing Privilege is having access to all media and content when a dangerous situation arises, deaf people find out last minute or later.

Hearing Privilege is no having to decide whether to search for a different doctor, or fight for your right to an interpreter.

Hearing Privilege is going to any cultural event, even if you learn about it in the last minute.

Hearing Privilege is being able to see that theater performance when it is available, for deaf people they might have sign language interpreters but it is not guaranteed.

Hearing Privilege means being able to make last minute decisions about going to a seminar/lecture or not.

Hearing Privilege is when people autocratically assume you're so much smarter than all deaf people solely because you can hear and they can't.

Hearing Privilege is assuming all deaf people are mute, or assuming a deaf person can hear normally just because the person speaks.

Hearing Privilege means access to policy, thus power over life in society, education, and work.

Hearing Privilege means being able to speak out against Audism and be taken more seriously than people who actually live with it.

Hearing Privilege is being able to access Facebook Livestreams and webinars Live in the moment and not waiting and wondering if they will have it captioned for the replay.

Hearing Privilege is not having one's own culture negated or questioned in a graduate level cultural diversity course by a teacher who claims to be a culturally competent therapist. This is despite the fact deaf culture is real and deserves to be acknowledged and honored.

Hearing Privilege is deciding against making the extra effort to ensure that any performance in a 4-weekend run of any theatrical production is accessible to deaf audiences, or assuming all audience members are hearing.

Hearing Privilege is when a deaf person requests a live interpreter for an appointment and the receptionist/doctor says that someone else (a hearing person) told them that using VRI is acceptable and that a live interpreter is not needed.

Hearing Privilege is being able to get involved in a social event or sporting event without requesting special accommodations.

Hearing Privilege is suddenly cutting off the conversation with a deaf person when you hear the other hearing person talk to you.

Hearing Privilege is when you don't get hung up on when calling for a job interview.

Hearing Privilege is not having your reading or writing skills questioned or not having someone tell you that you read or write better than expected.

Hearing Privilege is when you don't have to start a due process against your school's special education director to get the accommodations you need.

Hearing Privilege is when your parents don't have to deal with strangers or doctors that try pushing or tried to threaten to sue your parents to get cochlear implants for you.

Hearing Privilege is not having to worry about people telling you “it's not important” or “I'll tell you later” in a group conversation.

Hearing Privilege is when you don't have to worry about getting the wrong information in class.

Hearing Privilege is when you don't have to experience fast food restaurant works get customers behind you to cut in front of you when you are writing or typing down your order.

Hearing Privilege is when you don't have to prove the accommodation laws to the apartments you live in that you need flashing lights for doorbell and fire alarms when they refuse to provide or try to make you pay for it.

Hearing Privilege is when you aren't asked if you read lips or not.

Hearing Privilege is when people don't insult or mock you or be rude in general in comments sections when you point out inaccessible content for deaf people.

Hearing Privilege is not having to have a special channel so you can participate in the election process.

Hearing Privilege is applying for a job and not needing to worry about possibly bumping into the person(s) who decided to decline your application.

Hearing Privilege is when you don't have to worry about accessibility due to the ones developing new technology being mainly hearing people.

Hearing Privilege is not having to deal with people asking you stupid things due to you being deaf.

Hearing Privilege is deciding what is “good” enough for deaf people without first asking them.

Hearing Privilege is when you don't have to struggle as much just to be able to understand when someone speaks in low voice.

Hearing Privilege means not having to search for the script to your favorite radio shows or online interviews, or looking for the captions to turn them on.

Hearing Privilege is not being silenced by your interpreter simply because you were trying to ask a question to clarify something.

Hearing Privilege is being able to travel to any part of the world without being looked down upon because of how some cultures view deaf people.

Hearing Privilege is not worrying about having enough communication access around.

Hearing Privilege is being able to go to any concert without an interpreter.

Hearing Privilege is getting invited to different events or simple friends' gatherings without worrying about accessibility.

Hearing Privilege means not being ignored at the drive-thru, yelled at by cashiers, getting weird looks, etc.

Hearing Privilege means many videos on the internet, social media, etc are accessible despite many lacking captions, and even don't have the option to pick the setting.

Hearing Privilege is not having someone tell your partner they're “screwed up” in the head for being attracted to a deaf person.

Hearing Privilege is being able to go to any concert, even theater performances, or shows and not have to request or argue for rights to language access.

Hearing Privilege is when an interpreter's emotions are being over-valued over a deaf person's when that deaf person has serious complaints about the interpreter's conduct or skills.

Hearing Privilege is being able to place a direct phone call to a doctor's office, bank, school, or other institution and not worry if they will hang up on you because you have to use a third party as an interpreter, and the institution might view that as a burden.

Hearing Privilege is growing up understanding movies, radio, and shows. And not finding out about captions so late in one's development since back then deaf accessible shows and movies were a rarity.

Hearing Privilege is never having to look at the back of DVDs hoping its captioned and/or subtitled and walking away frustrated after a string of them are not accessible.

Hearing privilege is not being frustrated when you get a DVD that is related to your favorite series and it says it is captioned yet doesn't have them when you play the DVD. And getting angry as a result.

Hearing Privilege is knowing when your order is called, it's time to board your flight, being okay with getting calls from your doctor or mechanic, or when a counter is open without any visual cues to help you.

Hearing Privilege is knowing that the fact they're hearing won't affect job prospects.

Hearing Privilege means being able to feel sure any social event attended will be easily accessible, and do not feel the need to get in touch in advance to ensure it is accessible.

Hearing Privilege is when you have deaf friends on your social media and keep posting videos without including any captions or transcripts.

Hearing Privilege is when you hear a song for the first time and can catch around 80 percent of what's being said without needing to use a website.

Hearing Privilege is when a university does not recognize American Sign Language as a world language due to their belief and practice of phonocentrism.

Hearing Privilege is being able to hear someone walking behind you when it's too dark to be able to detect their presence.

Hearing Privilege is not getting mentally, physically, and verbally exhausted finding ways to communicate, or holding a conversation.

Hearing Privilege is going out to eat and understanding the waiter/waitress without extra effort or needing someone to interpret for you.

Hearing Privilege is being able to go to church or public speaking event of your choice, and not worry about if you'll have to “lip read” the speaker or if there will be an interpreter available.

Hearing Privilege is being able to listen to, understand, and enjoy a brand new song on the radio without looking up the lyrics.

Hearing Privilege is not being shoved out of the way in an elevator, bicycle path, or smacked hard by a shopping cart at the grocery store or otherwise manhandled without consent or a heads up when you don't respond to “excuse me.”

Hearing Privilege is when you can hear teachers of the deaf discussing in spoken English how they think a deaf child's question is “stupid”.

Hearing Privilege is knowing the car started without having to check the rpms.

Hearing Privilege is knowing the microwave popcorn is done before you smell it burning.

Hearing Privilege is knowing the water is still running or the vacuum is still on when you walk away.

Hearing Privilege is being able to go to any even last minute and understand without having to request an accommodation at least a week in advance.

Hearing Privilege is being able to call your phone to find it and locate it by sound as you get closer or farther away.

Hearing Privilege is hearing your phone ring from the other room, not missing calls because you didn't see the light flash.

Hearing Privilege is not being asked by many others what the game score is as they walk past you leaving church because you were using headphones with an FM system that looks like a radio in order to hear the sermon.

Hearing Privilege is not going to a movie, concert, or event with friends, that you planned in advance for, only to be told when you arrive that the sound system (CART/captions/interpreter) is unavailable.

Hearing Privilege is not being in the middle of a contentious court case when the judge says no one needs to speak your language (interpret) anymore because the other party's attorney says you understand fine without it.

Hearing Privilege is hearing the travel announcement that something changed before you missed your flight or passed the last subway station you could have transferred from.

Hearing Privilege is when you meet a deaf person who can use ASL to communicate and ask them way they haven't tried getting cochlear implants and be “cured”.

Hearing Privilege is when someone calls your office to leave a bomb threat and everyone gets the alert to get out of the building immediately. The deaf keeps working, not knowing.

Hearing Privilege is going to urgent care or the DMV without an appointment and being helped. And not turned away because they don't have an interpreter available.

Hearing Privilege is knowing institutions of education are well prepared, informed, and educated in how to teach and develop natural skills/abilities.

Hearing Privilege is when a hearing person knows someone is deaf and still talk in their face, using the advantage they can't have.

Hearing Privilege is when every school is required to have 4 SLPs and every school is seeking for funds to find an ASL therapist.

Hearing Privilege is when you applied for the federal government jobs through Schedule A certification for people with disabilities, they hired people with disabilities who can hear and use the voice. The government claimed “we are hiring targeted disabilities.” Actually, they are hiring targeted disabilities who can hear and use the voice.

Hearing Privilege is when the federal government employers say they chose applicants who have veteran background over applicants who have no background in the military, the military's policy says they cannot hire deaf people.

Hearing Privilege is when parents don't need to worry about fighting for their rights to place they hearing/deaf children in a specific/local school, and have to fight for their rights to place their deaf children in a deaf school.

Hearing Privilege is when hearing children are allowed to learn Spanish and ASL in public schools. While listening-spoken language parents allow their deaf children to learn Spanish, and forbid their deaf children from learning American Sign Language.

Hearing Privilege is when big companies such as CI, VRS, and Hearing Aids have few deaf employees.

Hearing Privilege is when the education system measures your secondary language in English for the admission for college and the passing score for the certification.

Hearing Privilege is when there is a new opportunity, they are able to move to anywhere, promoting with no problems.

Hearing Privilege is when the governor or state senate/representative wants to close a deaf school, there are many more public schools.

Hearing Privilege is not wrapping themselves into their books, magazines, laptop, or phone when left out of family events.

Hearing Privilege means not feeling entirely alone at big holiday meals with extended family members. It means exchanging more than just obligatory pleasantries with loved ones.

Hearing Privilege is when a hearing person gets to decide what is or isn't important for deaf people to know.

Hearing Privilege is having full access to wedding toasts and funeral eulogies.

Hearing Privilege is being able to talk to family overseas on the phone in their native language.

Hearing Privilege is being able to competitively job hunt purely based on your skill set without worrying about whether or not prospective employers are able/willing to accommodate you. Even though it's the law for them to do so.

Hearing Privilege is being able to make a cup of tea or make something in the oven, etc. without nearly burning down the house from an unheard boiling kettle or a beeping timer alarm unheard.

Hearing Privilege is being able to utilize passive learning modalities such as books on tape, podcasts, etc.

Hearing Privilege is not having to constantly visually double check yourself that the water/newfangled super quiet car motor/fan/etc is turned off.

Hearing Privilege is not having to worry when you need an interpreter to attend local festivals, free classes, workshops, training, and much more.

Hearing Privilege is when they have attitudes to deaf people when they have to use their phones to communicate at the fast food drive thru.

Hearing Privilege is being able to take long walks, runs, or bike rides and listen to podcasts, TED talks, or audio books to pass the time.

Hearing Privilege is the ability to watch videos from any source without worrying about not having captions or how accurate they will be.

Hearing Privilege is being able to decide to attend an event at the last minute without thinking about whether there will be interpretation or if interpreters have already been hired.

Hearing Privilege is not having extra people (interpreters) at a medical appointment.

Hearing Privilege is when glasses are covered by insurance but having to pay up to 5,000 dollars out of your pocket for hearing aids to help you hear since they are not covered by insurance.

Hearing Privilege is when a hearing person tells a deaf person that pursuing their dream in the entertainment industry is unrealistic and a waste of time.

Hearing Privilege is going to a family dinner and not having to wonder what everyone is saying or ask again and again what they said.

Hearing Privilege is making effortless small talk in elevators, trains, and waiting rooms; and people feeling comfortable with you being around.

Hearing Privilege is being able to understand and participate with your family's conversation in their spoken language with ease, not feeling left out.

Hearing Privilege is saving more on the water bill due to being able to hear if the water faucet is turned off or the toilet is still not running after flushing.

Hearing Privilege is being able to easily have close and meaningful relationships with your extended family members because communication is not an issue.

Hearing Privilege is not having to spend thousands and thousands of dollars on hearing devices, speech therapy, and tutors for English. Not having to miss out on certain classes throughout the 12 years of primary education because of speech classes. Not having to miss out on social opportunities. Not having to constantly get in a fight with family for equal access to communication.

Hearing Privilege is not having to use your hair to hide your hearing devices.

Hearing Privilege is being able to get any job without fear of discrimination.

Hearing Privilege is having to not hear “never mind” or “I'll tell you later”, “It's not really that important”, or “You don't need to know.” if one misses a conversation or parts of it.

Hearing Privilege is being able to meet with anyone, anytime at work without having to schedule your time around the interpreter's availability.

Hearing Privilege is being able to access any urgent care, emergency room, or hospital without having to scramble for an interpreter last minute and advocate for your own basic right to communication access.

Hearing Privilege is not understanding that the unemployment rate for deaf/hard of hearing is ridiculously high.

Hearing Privilege is being able to go to conventions and conferences on business and not feeling lost in conversation between others.

Hearing Privilege is knowing what the video premieres will be saying without needing accommodations.

Hearing Privilege is not having to ask the person interviewing you for a job to stop turning their head from you when talking.

Hearing Privilege is being ignorant about deaf culture and American Sign Language, until it happens to you personally.

Hearing Privilege is communicating with others without having to ask them to please look directly at you while attempting a conversation and not having to master the art of gently but firmly letting strangers know that no, it is not okay to be deliberately ignored.

Hearing Privilege is not dreading family events or any events in general just because of communication barriers.

Hearing Privilege is having the choice not to listen.

Hearing Privilege is reading all the Hearing Privilege hashtags and seeing all the stories and going “I never thought about that!”

Hearing Privilege means being able to move along in society on a daily basis without ever having to think about how their hearing has privileged them.

Hearing Privilege is either intentionally or unintentionally making decisions for the deaf without their involvement or participation.

Hearing Privilege is not having everyday communication barriers be the norm.

Hearing Privilege is your roommates, family, etc. not understanding the stuff you go through on a regular basis.

Hearing Privilege is where all deaf people live in a world that accommodates hearing people and forgets about deaf people.

And so much more. To list them all would take many weeks, if not months.

Basically, we live in a culture constructed by and for the hearing majority. The ability to hear naturally offers many advantages and inherent opportunities. We cannot move towards a just and equal society until everyone recognizes this oppressive bias.
Deafness and Hearing Privilege
I needed to get it off my shoulders, vent. As a person who has a cochlear implant and is completely deaf without it, and dealing with Audism, my feelings needed an outlet. Much like how an artist expresses through artwork, I've done the same through writing.

I also went through sites such a post on Steemit.com, a post in Huffingtonpost.com, as well as the Hearing Privilege page in Facebook.  Some are from things I've heard about, while others are from my own experiences. The Hearing Privilege awareness thing was going on for some time, it was a real eye opener, and I thought of spreading it via writing.

This is not meant to be mean to anyone, I, like many others, wanted to increase awareness of the issue. And I know that not every hearing person has every privilege on the list, obviously some don't for various reasons. And not trying to accuse hearing people, but raise awareness for the daily energy suckers for deaf and hard of hearing people.

One would think with one in eight Americans above the age of 12 having haring loss in both ears, that more effort would be made into making things accessible. And about 90 percent of deaf children are born to hearing parents, which means hearing people still lack an understanding and awareness of deaf accessibility challenges and the social isolation surrounding hearing loss.
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I've been wanting a discussion about MSTs and Deconstructions. I will list questions that have numbers in front of them.

Comments and discussion are very welcome, though keep it civil.
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MSTs- basically a type of satire performed by adding humorous running commentary on top of another work. “Humor” can range from tongue-in-cheek to outright vitriol.

1. What do you think of MSTs?

2. How far do you think an MST is allowed to go?

3. Do you think it is ok to MST a published work?

4. Do you think it is ok to MST someone's fanfic?

Deconstructions- basically means to take something like a piece of work such as a movie, TV show, game, book, etc, and take apart something about the work to understand its meaning and relevance to us in real life. It can also take something that is scary or otherwise disturbing, and run with it.

1. What do you think of deconstructions?

2. How far do you think a deconstruction is allowed to go?

3. Do you think it is ok to deconstruct a published work?

4. Do you think it is ok to deconstruct someone's fanfic

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To show one way of how one could reply, I'll give my answers:

MSTs-

1. They are a fine hobby as long as one does not go too far. Not my kind of thing though, I'd rather write my own fanfics.

2. One can tear apart the work in question. That is fine since it is what an MST is supposed to do. But one shouldn't go so far as to directly insult the writer or creator of the work. That is too far, and they can be deeply hurt by that. Has happened to me before, and it wasn't pretty.

3. Yes, it is ok to MST a published work as long as the MST'er doesn't directly insult the one who created the work. Even if the work contains the worst of things and horrid unfortunate implications, call out the horrible things and unfortunate implications. Since that's part of what an MST can be. And if you bought said work, such as a book or movie, and it was terrible, I'd say an MST is in order since it can help relive one's frustrations and anger.

4. Now, MST'ing someone's fanfic is on very shaky ground in my opinion. Since I believe fanfics should have as much protection as fanart. Since if one were to take someone's fanart and post it on another site without permission, whether to tear it apart or stealing it, then people get up in arms and got after the person and get them to take it down. Yet, fanfics don't get that kind of protection. Despite the fact if one says fanfics are stealing from a published work, wouldn't that apply to fanart too?

Deconstructions-

1. Deconstructions can be very interesting. With published works that have fanfics, if the published work has Fridge Horror, basically something dark or horrifying that is revealed when thought about, that can make excellent deconstruction material.

2. Like with MST's, one shouldn't insult the original creator of the work in question. Just focus on the story, the characters, and make sure the deconstruction does what it is supposed to do.

3. Yes, just like with MST'ing a published work.

4. As with deconstructing someone's fanfic, this is on shaky ground in my opinion. It would be safer to ask for permission first. If they say yes then one can do it. If not, then respect their wishes. If they don't reply, it may be safer not to do so. And it feels like it would be stealing to use content from someone else's fanfic exactly as it is without asking for permission. Using the concept is a different story, as long as one uses their own words and their own work. Since fanfic writers get mad when someone plagiarizes someone else's fanfic.
Discussion: MSTs and Deconstructions
This is my first attempt at doing something like this, since I was wanting discussion about it.
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Hope everyone had a great Christmas and Happy New Year's!

A new year, and new possibilities...

I have been through many hardships myself, but like Naruto Uzumaki, I'll never ever give up.

And I have many new fanfic ideas, want to make more fanfics this year than the last. After all, practice makes one better!

I have also gotten into new fandoms such as Overwatch. Such a very interesting game with a story with so many possibilities. Really like the female characters, imagine all of them on the same team...any bad guy is really going to have a horrible day between getting hacked by Sombra, Tracer zipping around, Pharah raining justice from above, Mei putting the enemy on ice, Widowmaker sniping, D. Va's mech ripping through enemy ranks, Zarya just plain thrashing them with that beam of her's that gets stronger the more damage her and her teammate's barriers absorb, Ana sniping and also healing teammates and using a sleep dart to put foes to sleep for a time, Mercy's healing, and Symmetra's turrets...

Also I have I have really gotten into doing Neji fanfics. I was afraid of doing characters out of character by accident but I realized that I likely wouldn't get any jerks commenting as long as I try and ask for constructive criticism. Because the last time something bad happened as a result was years ago, and I was a rookie and did the characterizations of characters very badly. And it was an entirely different fandom (Mass Effect, for those curious).

I have been writing fanfics in other fandoms as well such as Halo (many are set in the Forerunner era) and Overwatch amongst others.

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Tone and Paradox hurtled over a small mountainside and down its steep slope, running as fast as ever.

Paradox jumped off near the base and landed on the ground followed by Tone. "How many kilometers do you think we ran?"

"I'd say about eighty kilometers." Tone kept pace. He noticed the powder looked a bit more fresh. "What if we're going the wrong way?"

Paradox felt pressure on her body. "Tone, your armor tightening on you at times?

Tone panted a bit. "Yes, not working as well on maintaining my stamina."

Paradox felt it again, this time worse than before. "An armor malfunction?" She tried to contact her ancilla. "Reconfigure the armor, think its the eighty kilometer run doing it." No answer. "Something else?"

Tone nearly tripped and dropped Shadow onto the powdery desert floor.

Shadow had a look of fear. "My armor, its-!" Shadow's armor was visibly tightening on his entire body, becoming tighter very rapidly. "Get it off of me!" A second later, he screamed in agony while his tissue was squished. Shadow started to scream like no Forerunner should. His bones were crushed, before finally his armor violently constricted inward. Purple blood flew out of his mouth and nose. His eyes exploded. What was left was crushed mush.

Paradox was in shock before quickly coming to her senses. "Take the armor off!" She ripped her armor off quickly, tossing it away from her. She looked at Tone and saw he had done the same.

Under the armor, Forerunners wore an undershirt and underpants, in case if they had to remove armor around others. Tone had the same fuzz down the nape of his neck and back of his hands. While Paradox lacked the fuzz on the neck or hands.

Riser had a look of alarm. "Paradox!"

The female Forerunner spun around, and saw that her armor was writhing around, kicking up ashy dust. It lunged at her but she jumped to the left. "It's like our armors' are possessed!" She noticed the armors weren't their usual colors, the hardlight parts were glowing sickly green.

Tone's armor had lunged at its wearer and missed, joining Paradox's armor in picking their next target, Riser.

Riser jumped back while the armors writhed, slithering along like snakes. "Bad armor!"

Paradox quickly rushed in to pick up Riser. "We need to get out of here!"

Tone quickly followed. "First we crash into the middle of some Flood cursed wasteland, then our armors try to kill us...we really should've stayed with the Warriors and Lifeworkers."

The two ran fast, armor-less and only in their underclothing. Feeling naked and more vulnerable.
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Paradox and Tone stopped at a flat expanse of powder covered land, and saw how fresh it was. Something foul caught their noses, and they looked in the direction of the oncoming night.

Tone gasped. "Oh no..."

Off in the direction, many, many kilometers away, were mountain like structures. Tall, round, and expelling brown material.

Riser looked at the mountains. "Volcanoes?"

Paradox shook her head. "Spore-peaks." Her voice was laced with fear. "They're how the Flood spread their spores." She turned to Tone. "We need to go, now!"

The two took off running, away from the spore peaks, away from where the wind would blow the spores.

Day became sunset, and eventually night.

Paradox coughed and wheezed. The damn spores, we'll choke! She felt her lungs and throat burning. She could no longer run, it hurt too much to do so. She noticed Tone was in a similar state of distress.

Tone coughed violently. "We need to get somewhere, somewhere away from this." He coughed worse and staggered.

Paradox staggered as well and Riser felt too heavy. Her voice was weary with sickness. "Walk alongside us." She let him onto the ground, and continued walking.
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Paradox walked in front, Tone behind her. And Riser behind the two of them.

Riser walked beside them, looking at them with a solemn expression. Sad. They seemed so strong, now they're without armor, afraid, just like people. He saw the skies were becoming clouded. He noticed that with passage of time, Paradox and Tone became sicker and sicker. They were walking like their legs were very heavy.

They were violently coughing and wheezing. Their skin looked very gray and pale at the same time. And they walked slowly, unable to walk straight.

Riser saw clouds cover up the stars. The smell of mold off old fruit assaulted his nose, and the color of the dusty-green clouds were foreboding, an aura of misery.
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Paradox wheezed and coughed violently, and almost tripped on her severely weakened feet. We can't die like this! Not after going so far! Her lungs felt like they were filling up with the powder. It was clinging to the inside of her throat, nose, and airways as well.

Rain started to fall. Raindrops containing powder carried over from the spore peaks. It begun to shroud everything and even moved in the puddles.

Paradox caught some raindrops on her hand and saw that it was more of the powder inside, which clung to her skin. She coughed again and saw Tone coughing violently, stagger, and fall before picking himself up again with great effort.

Tone saw a rock overhanging. "We should take shelter." He tried to take another step but staggered.

Paradox caught him, and wrung his arm around her neck to try to support him. "Let's get under there, maybe we'll get through this." She wearily made her way to the overhanging and laid Tone against the rocky wall. She sat down beside him.

Tone started coughing violently once again and wheezing worse. "Can't-" He struggled for breath. "Breathe!"

Paradox saw to her horror that every time Tone coughed, powder flew out. And it was dripping out of his nose too. Tone started to gag, unable to take a breath, and clutched his throat, the powder having filled it up along with his airways. He fell back against the rocky wall, dying. Soon, the life left his eyes.

Paradox coughed violently and felt the powder fill up her longs, and now filling up her throat, and airways. So this is how it ends? She gagged and tried to cough the powder out but it stayed, some did fly out. And it dripped out of her nose. She felt herself unable to breath. She felt the powder writhing about inside while her vision faded. Paradox fell back against the rocks, last seeing Riser laying on his back, hands covering his face, and she breathed no more.

Riser went to sleep to get away from the fear, to die unafraid.
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Riser awoke the next morning, and realized he wasn't dead.

He stood up and the powder fell off his skin, it was dry, crusty and dead. The same color as the 'desert' they had originally crash landed in. And smelled of old dung in deep caves.

He looked to where Paradox and Tone were the night before. And they were dead, clotted powder that tried to merge over the night. Their flesh and bones had dissolved. Riser felt sadness within. The good ones die. He thought of Paradox and Tone. Go missing. He thought of Bornstellar, who was last seen being held prisoner by Faber. Or exclusive, refuse to be found. He thought of the Lady, the Librarian, the Lifeshaper herself.

Riser quickly moved onward, determined to get out of the graveyard-desert, lest the powder figures out how to kill him as well.
Different Yet Similar Chapter 3
This is the third and last chapter of the story.
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Just learned about two more Uchiha from Itachi Shinden: Kagen, and Hazuki, Izumi's mother.
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1st-Hashirama-Senju Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2017
Oh, interesting!

Hope things are going well for you and your writings! Things are going well for me too. :)
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How goes Chapter 2?
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